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Postby FerretParade » Wed Feb 11, 2009 9:41 am

Its a shit ink job if thats inked. You need to like not scribble the ink line like the sketch line...go out and buy a couple micron pens for that. They are only like 2.99 a piece. I perfer Zigs but they don't make em anymore so they is hard to find = 0
so there's a high school football coach sittin on the couch,
with a toothpick in his mouth.
and the stray dog won't forget the day,
he tricked him with a chocolate shake. (little trick)

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Postby Segovia » Wed Feb 11, 2009 12:48 pm

Well the sketch was originally in pencil but I didn't want it to get smudge so I had to use what I had at the time which was just a pen. I did this sketch during Spanish and I didn't have my usual Sharpie kit.

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Postby Segovia » Wed Feb 11, 2009 1:18 pm

Here's that sketch again but this time I had time to ink it properly

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Postby FerretParade » Wed Feb 11, 2009 4:20 pm

The way you drew this makes it look like a big chunk was taken out of the neck and collar bone...it simply is not drawn. So the head looks very detached like it is floating away from the body. That shoulder is way to damn low.

You are trying hard for anatomy on the body and now focusing less on the head and it shows. You still have too much of a beach-ball look and does not feel a part of the rest of the drawing.

Those feet are way out of perspective and honestly don't even look like feet. Your hands have no palms

But my biggest peeve is if you are gonna go all out on making an interesting pose and a better drawn body why did you settle for such a terrible anime face expression. The rest of that drawing tries to go for a bit of roundness then you make that face all quick an angular like you just gave up and didn't care. The face is the most important part of the drawing. Especially the eyes.

Find some sheet on the internet with boxes that have a label for different expressions and work on that.
so there's a high school football coach sittin on the couch,
with a toothpick in his mouth.
and the stray dog won't forget the day,
he tricked him with a chocolate shake. (little trick)

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Postby Ibun » Wed Feb 11, 2009 4:24 pm

=^o^=
Killin' the first born of lyrical Yul Brynners.

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Postby Mekkah » Wed Feb 11, 2009 7:18 pm

The way you drew this makes it look like a big chunk was taken out of the neck and collar bone...it simply is not drawn. So the head looks very detached like it is floating away from the body. That shoulder is way to damn low.
I actually have to disagree with that.

The neck line is there, but it's hard to tell apart from the anime-like hair lines.

I do agree with the majority of everything else you said.

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To you Roger:

You should definitely work on rounding the faces a little bit more, instead of giving the sides of the face very, very straight lines.

What I would recommend is practice adding some small detail fur to the side of the face (and on to the inside of the face).

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Postby FerretParade » Wed Feb 11, 2009 11:27 pm

No that line makes it look like part of the back shoulder with how low that other shoulder is
so there's a high school football coach sittin on the couch,
with a toothpick in his mouth.
and the stray dog won't forget the day,
he tricked him with a chocolate shake. (little trick)

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Postby Mekkah » Thu Feb 12, 2009 1:10 am

No that line makes it look like part of the back shoulder with how low that other shoulder is
Looks like some form of a neck to me.

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Postby Segovia » Thu Feb 12, 2009 1:02 pm

Well I have taken FP comments into consideration. I con probably improve on the body but the face, I am not so sure. Last night was trying to fix the head to make it less of a beachball look but it seems that it's going nowhere. So yeah it's going to be difficult.

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Postby Segovia » Fri Feb 13, 2009 11:22 pm

Here's a sketch I did earlier today.

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I get depressed everytime I see it.

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Postby MuffinSticks » Sat Feb 14, 2009 12:13 am

Aww he has no friends <3
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see, how far raine dog got placed in the background? take that you blue bitch

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Postby Angstwolf » Sat Feb 14, 2009 6:03 am

I got two Valentines, and I'm pretty sure they were from people who gave them to everyone on the floor. My roommate, on the other hand, got something like sixteen.

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Postby Segovia » Sat Feb 14, 2009 6:25 am

Happy Valentines Day.

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Unlike most comics I've done, this one comes straight from the heart.

Just incase you can't read it here's the text

Roger: Sigh
Reggie: What’s wrong Roger?

Roger: I don’t know. I guess it’s the fact that this is the 5th year in a row that I didn’t get a Valentines Card.

Roger: Call me old fashion but I liked it better in Elementary where everybody was obligated to give each other cards. Back then I got a card no matter what; whether the person was my friend or not, I got a card that actually gave me the illusion of appreciation.

Roger: I try all year to be the best person I can be to all of my friends and peers but when Valentines Day comes around I am constantly surrounded by people getting gifts with balloons and candy. All while I am sitting in the back trying to do my work in peace.

Roger: sigh. I feel so alone.

Reggie: Well you’ll always have me, Roger.
Roger: Oh. Now I feel complete.

Sorry it had to be so depressing.

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Postby Mekkah » Sat Feb 14, 2009 7:41 am

If he's a fox, don't bend his ears like that in depression.

Fold the ears back.

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Postby MuffinSticks » Sat Feb 14, 2009 8:00 pm

Acceptance is the first step on the long road to recovery.
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<Muninn> Too furry for saneville, too girly for boystown
see, how far raine dog got placed in the background? take that you blue bitch


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