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Postby Muninn » Thu Jan 15, 2004 9:35 pm

There i was writing some poetry (how easy it sounds) when suddenly i found myself composing something that would be very Millie and before i realized i'd gotten three pages worth of my first Ozy and Millie poem.<br>This was probably inspired by the recent rerun of comics but the story and idea developed independantly. It's rather long but i hope you like it.<br><br><u>The Rebellion</u><br><br>In the long hot days of a sweltering May<br>Idling the hours and letting the mind astray<br>Miss Sorkowitz jabbered coldly in a monotone<br>Suffocating Millie with her mindless drone<br>Subjecting her to topics that have no place<br>In an empty moan lacking any skill or grace<br><br>Her weary head drifted backward on the chair<br>In a manner light and yet still very debonair<br>She watched the mist fall as her eyes glazed<br>Then Millie saw Miss S. and her eyes blazed<br>With a swish her pointer crashed in silence<br>But Millie, no, she had no reason for penance<br><br>Millie sat bolt upright and saw papers pass<br>As the kids now sank all across the class<br>All except for Ozy, who looked fresh as ever<br>Now she saw the reason, being so darn clever<br>A math test, Millie immediately did surmise<br>With so many there's no element of surprise<br><br>She looked at the paper and a shadow crossed<br>Realizing darkly that she was now totally lost<br>Her hands trembled and she didn't know why<br>Caught behind the enemy lines without an ally<br>Subtract this divide then add and multiply that<br>Doom had found Millie in the chair she sat<br><br>Poor Millie buried her head on the dirty table<br>To answer these questions she just wasn't able<br>Then a jerk and a thought brought her back<br>And her mind formulated a cunning plan of attack<br>A brilliant strategy, no fault anywhere in it<br>She knew it'd soon make every teacher submit<br><br>She raised her hand and with a mighty sigh<br>Not to mention a great big roll of her eyes<br>Miss S. said that yes she may go for a drink<br>If only she knew what the fox did just think<br>She'd have tied, trussed and bound Millie<br>Just like that cannibal in that scary movie<br><br>From her locker (since she had headed there)<br>Millie fished out a few things to prepare<br>Two or three large placards and a marker pen<br>To put into swift action her flawless plan<br>But still she hadn't put to full assistance<br>The plan's piece-de-resistance<br><br>She placed the placards on the lawn outside<br>Under some hedges she left them to hide<br>Then running back, while in a playful hurry<br>She stopped to ponder the oncoming flurry<br>Then casually she stepped inside the room<br>Of the headmaster's, her plan she'd resume<br><br>Mr. Beauvine wasn't surprised, even a little<br>Her motions she knew he'd very soon belittle<br>He asked what kind of trouble she was now in<br>Care to give me a quick recap or bulletin?<br>That must be his idea of sarcasm, how laughable!<br>It's not even good enough to be assessable<br><br>Millie said that Miss S. had called for him<br>(But this was all of course a mere prelim)<br>Now Millie's plan was nearing its completion<br>A glorious pathway to freedom's revolution<br>To grasp the honest children out of the hand<br>Of the dictators vile and evil high command<br><br>She rushed outside and plunged each placard<br>Onto sticks and them onto the ground hard<br>So that right out of every classroom window<br>Her intended message was what the children saw<br>Then quickly she sprinted back to the office<br>To insert that final searing kiss<br><br>She called out to every little girl and boy<br>Proclaiming the revolution over the tannoy<br>She told them to look out of their window<br>To have a glimpse of the world of tomorrow<br>She guessed they did for she heard a roar<br>Ring throughout the school's entire corridors<br><br>Total chaos now ensued over rule and permit<br>And the teachers just couldn't cope with it<br>The children had finally been liberated free<br>Thanks to the genius of none but Millie<br>Now the teachers were all trussed alike<br>Owing to her fast, hard and swift strike<br><br>All of the grown-ups (government dictators)<br>Plus every one of their whiny collaborators<br>Felicia said, un-American blasphemous doodyhead<br>When along with the teachers she was led<br>The masses had risen and sweet independence<br>Now replaced their slave-like existence<br><br>Millie said, glorious day, oh brilliant hour!<br>The proletarian worker now has the power<br>The education system, the vital backbone<br>Of the establishments supremely overgrown<br>Tentacles of authority, flowing with pus<br>Now belonged to no one else but us<br><br>Her plan to get out of class had succeeded<br>And even her own expectations were exceeded<br>Without teachers school became a clubhouse<br>For every species, from elephant to mouse<br>But that freedom had been firmly attained<br>What to do now, Millie's mind it sprained<br><br>To set laws and remake rules would just<br>Go against their cause so they now must<br>Lay the groundwork of their new kingdom<br>Echoing with the subtle chords of freedom<br>They wouldn't fall prey to petty greed<br>And their school would be a haven indeed<br><br>Then things began to get hot and Millie saw<br>A few noisy police cars or maybe even more<br>She saw an officer get out and walk toward<br>Mumbling something which none of them heard<br>He tried the door but they'd firmly locked it<br>Then a fist on the panel a few times he hit<br><br>Millie called to anyone to bring her some<br>Rotten tomatoes and then very quickly come<br>There were plenty left in the school canteen<br>Tomatoes which daylight had never even seen<br>The officer then straightened his belt rim<br>As Millie shuffled so as to easily pelt him<br><br>The fellow looked up and saw the sun shift<br>Into what seemed like an abrupt eclipse<br>As a few dozen moldy old tomatoes hurled<br>Suddenly darkened this cops precious world<br>And seconds later he fell without a sound<br>Drenched in tomato juice onto the ground<br><br>The children had won The Battle of Tomato<br>In the burning noon of May, all lent a paw<br>The other cops came to pull him away afar<br>To the flashing lights of their police car<br>Millie beamed with pride as each individual<br>Began singing "Power to the People"<br><br>And they took onions, rutabegas and tomatoes<br>Watermelons, mangos, eggplants and potatoes<br>And hurled them onto the police barricaders<br>Upon those malicious and daring invaders<br>The times they were a-changin' as they sang<br>And their songs of freedom, in the air hang<br><br>Soon in the garden, classrooms and halls<br>With battle marks hanging on the walls<br>They let out a final cheer of joyous power<br>This was one rebellion they'd not smother<br>And in the heat of midday she finally saw<br>Their invading enemies now hastily withdraw<br><br>And then Millie awoke, her head upon the table<br>It was all a dream of some victorious rebel<br>Her memories were filled with her recent dream<br>But as she gazed down she let out a shrill scream<br>Her paper remained there, unmarked and clean<br>Reality and dreams Millie was caught in-between

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Postby Zylo » Thu Jan 15, 2004 9:56 pm

Very, very clever, Jacob. Excellent work.
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Postby Elscire » Thu Jan 15, 2004 10:14 pm

Hehe, I like that. and like <b>like</b> like <!--emo&;)--><img src='http://definecynical.mancubus.net/forum ... s/wink.gif' border='0' style='vertical-align:middle' alt='wink.gif' /><!--endemo--><br><br>Especially the end, though I wonder what could have possibly been on the placards!
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Postby Miles E Traysandor » Thu Jan 15, 2004 10:38 pm

Excellent poem! Encore!
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Postby simon » Thu Jan 15, 2004 10:51 pm

My....God.... That is just genius. I should add a "Writings" section to the Stuff page, this definately needs to be archived.

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Postby Sabre » Thu Jan 15, 2004 11:03 pm

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Postby Burning Sheep Productions » Fri Jan 16, 2004 3:01 am

H- holey moley!<br>Wawow!!
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Postby Doctor Fred » Fri Jan 16, 2004 4:12 am

*aplause*<br>very, very, very good, Jacob. Very good.
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Postby The J.A.M. » Fri Jan 16, 2004 4:51 am

[...unWARP!!!]<br><br>Good evening.<br><br>Amazing poem!! Nice ending, too!<br><br>Until next time, remember:<br><br>I<br><br>AM<br><br>THE<br><br>J.A.M.<br><br>Good evening.<br><br>[WARP!!!]

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Postby Zaaphod » Fri Jan 16, 2004 6:31 am

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Postby Muninn » Fri Jan 16, 2004 8:26 pm

Thanks for the replies everyone, much appreciated. As for the placards, i'm sure what you think were written on them will be far more ingenious than anything i could say.<br><br>Unfortunately i don't have anymore, maybe i'll write more soon. Thanks very much.

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Postby Sabre » Fri Jan 16, 2004 10:37 pm

Please. do.<br><br> Oh and by the way you've got 300 points.

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Postby Tavis » Sat Jan 17, 2004 2:33 am

Wow. That's some good writing, Jacob. how long did it take you to get all of that written?

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Postby Muninn » Sat Jan 17, 2004 10:33 pm

If i remember correctly it took about an hour, i write quite fast and if the poem is story driven like this one, it's even easier.


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