Story arc - Plan in advance what story you want to tell, concentrate on that story until it's told along the way pick up threads for other stories.
Length - I don't mind the chapters, they are okay but have the wait between then justify the quantity (and quality) of the finished product.
Be Narrative - Show, don't tell.
But I would have the story mapped out beforehand, not this whimsical cluster-f**k we have now
Who sleeps shall awake, looking through the window of our lives
Waiting for the moment to arrive...
Show us the silence in the rise,
So that we may someday understand...
Animals are usually dumb and oblivious
or just........naw it sucks forever
Bugger off you bastards bugger off
Like a heard of bloody swine who refuse to leave the trough
You'll get no more this evening so you bastards bugger off
And this jumping around really needs to stop. Pick a story and stick with it. God knows where she'll be next but it won't be with that Alpha dog, that's for sure.
Also stop making it seem like humans are so bad. We get it... can't we tell a good story without that? I mean really, a talking dog would be AWESOME! Why would anyone be angry at her or call her names or what have you? I mean I realize a talking dog isn't realistic but... still, come on.
so yeah basically what everyone else said.
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