Blank Verse Slam.
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Lims’ and haikus, simpleton poems tis thou.
Blank verse, it you write, now be gone dummies.
Syllables of ten, one line art thee ho!
No rhyme or else art thee no blank verse. Si?
Blank verse, it you write, now be gone dummies.
Syllables of ten, one line art thee ho!
No rhyme or else art thee no blank verse. Si?
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'Though verse in blank may seem at first a breeze
I feel it must contain some sanity.
Your verse seemed hastily made, Segovia.
The grammar was atrociously written.
(in other words you were trying so hard to simply make the syllables fit, and to use thees and thous, that it ended up making less sense than yoda. Plus you didn't use "thou" properly)
I feel it must contain some sanity.
Your verse seemed hastily made, Segovia.
The grammar was atrociously written.
(in other words you were trying so hard to simply make the syllables fit, and to use thees and thous, that it ended up making less sense than yoda. Plus you didn't use "thou" properly)
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Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
I have some news Dr. Sticks yours is not a blank verse. If you would have noticed in mine, blank verse has a series of ten syllables of stressed and unstressed syllbles. Yours doesn't have the right syllable structure. In a blank verse it has to go in this order.
/_/_/_/_/_ or _/_/_/_/_/ _= unstressed /=stressed.
Come on I think you would have come up with reason for why it was written like that.
In blank verse you're supposed to play with the scentece structure. Read up on your shakespearean history.
Be gone simpleton! Thou is not ripe for,
This poem style! Write more Read more then come back.
/_/_/_/_/_ or _/_/_/_/_/ _= unstressed /=stressed.
Come on I think you would have come up with reason for why it was written like that.
In blank verse you're supposed to play with the scentece structure. Read up on your shakespearean history.
Be gone simpleton! Thou is not ripe for,
This poem style! Write more Read more then come back.
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no, my verse was iambic pentameter. But it's more than just making your words to fit within the meter, it's the art of making it still work as things that someone would actually say. "Blank verse, it you write, now be gone dummies" is just way too weird lol
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Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
highlighted are the mistakes in syllable structure.
"'Though verse" Two unstressed syllables
"blank may" two stressed syllables
"a breeze" two stresseds
"I feel it" three stressed syllables
"sanity." Three stressed syllables
"Your verse" two unstressed syllables
"seemed hastily made" five stressed syllables
In blank verse it as to go stressed, unstressed or unstressed, stressed.
That's a blank verse.
"'Though verse" Two unstressed syllables
"blank may" two stressed syllables
"a breeze" two stresseds
"I feel it" three stressed syllables
"sanity." Three stressed syllables
"Your verse" two unstressed syllables
"seemed hastily made" five stressed syllables
In blank verse it as to go stressed, unstressed or unstressed, stressed.
Be gone simpleton! Thou is not ripe for,
This poem style! Write more Read more then come back.
That's a blank verse.
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you're mispronouncing my words.
You see, it's open to interpretation of whether the speaker is stressing the words. not ALL words are open to interpretation, but personally I would say that "be gone" would both be stressed.
also, "seemed hastily made" would be pronounced as four syllables.
You see, it's open to interpretation of whether the speaker is stressing the words. not ALL words are open to interpretation, but personally I would say that "be gone" would both be stressed.
also, "seemed hastily made" would be pronounced as four syllables.
http://www.spingain.com/?ref=146518
Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
Actually, it's five, unless you pronounce hastily "hast'ly".also, "seemed hastily made" would be pronounced as four syllables.
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I am. I didn't want to type it as "seemt hastly made" though because that would look weird lol
Johnathan, I'm really not trolling when I say that if you focus on it, you can choose whether or not you stress a syllable
Johnathan, I'm really not trolling when I say that if you focus on it, you can choose whether or not you stress a syllable
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Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
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I love that song Doc
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Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
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yeah, we should either stop discussing and start poeticizing, or we should move this out of "Forum Games".
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Well put doog. You never posted anything offensive whatsoever
we know she'll be back, like a good bitch should.
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