Blank Verse Slam.

[Segovia]

Lims’ and haikus, simpleton poems tis thou.
Blank verse, it you write, now be gone dummies.
Syllables of ten, one line art thee ho!
No rhyme or else art thee no blank verse. Si?

[Dr. Sticks]

'Though verse in blank may seem at first a breeze
I feel it must contain some sanity.
Your verse seemed hastily made, Segovia.
The grammar was atrociously written.


(in other words you were trying so hard to simply make the syllables fit, and to use thees and thous, that it ended up making less sense than yoda. Plus you didn't use "thou" properly)

[Segovia]

I have some news Dr. Sticks yours is not a blank verse. If you would have noticed in mine, blank verse has a series of ten syllables of stressed and unstressed syllbles. Yours doesn't have the right syllable structure. In a blank verse it has to go in this order.

/_/_/_/_/_ or _/_/_/_/_/ _= unstressed /=stressed.

Come on I think you would have come up with reason for why it was written like that.
In blank verse you're supposed to play with the scentece structure. Read up on your shakespearean history.

Be gone simpleton! Thou is not ripe for,
This poem style! Write more Read more then come back.

[Dr. Sticks]

no, my verse was iambic pentameter. But it's more than just making your words to fit within the meter, it's the art of making it still work as things that someone would actually say. "Blank verse, it you write, now be gone dummies" is just way too weird lol

[Segovia]

highlighted are the mistakes in syllable structure.

"'Though verse" Two unstressed syllables
"blank may" two stressed syllables
"a breeze" two stresseds
"I feel it" three stressed syllables
"sanity." Three stressed syllables
"Your verse" two unstressed syllables
"seemed hastily made" five stressed syllables

In blank verse it as to go stressed, unstressed or unstressed, stressed.

Be gone simpleton! Thou is not ripe for,
This poem style! Write more Read more then come back.

That's a blank verse.

[Dr. Sticks]

you're mispronouncing my words.

You see, it's open to interpretation of whether the speaker is stressing the words. not ALL words are open to interpretation, but personally I would say that "be gone" would both be stressed.


also, "seemed hastily made" would be pronounced as four syllables.

[Segovia]

To me when a syllable is stressed it causes tention in my face and when a syllable is unstressed the face is loose. To understand exaggerate the sounds of the syllables.

[nickspoon]

also, "seemed hastily made" would be pronounced as four syllables.

Actually, it's five, unless you pronounce hastily "hast'ly".

[Dr. Sticks]

I am. I didn't want to type it as "seemt hastly made" though because that would look weird lol

Johnathan, I'm really not trolling when I say that if you focus on it, you can choose whether or not you stress a syllable

[Segovia]

I know you are not trolling, we're merely having a poetic conversation.

[Doc Sigma]

Let me
smell
your dick

[Dr. Sticks]

I love that song Doc

[MuffinSticks]

What is this shit and why am I posting in it

[Dr. Sticks]

yeah, we should either stop discussing and start poeticizing, or we should move this out of "Forum Games".

[MuffinSticks]

I just meant that I don't understand this game at all